Jack's House

https://malespank.net/viewStory.php?id=59584

There is an image discussion on the AI forum at MMSA that I will give the link to: viewtopic.php?f=30&t=10278.

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 The AI created a look of sheer terror on his face - rightfully so. I began to muse wondering what if his "oh s-hit" moment was less about running from the tornado than it was about running to something.

So, I wondered what he could be running to. Several things came to mind but I settled on a pet. I then decided that the pet would be a rescued piglet.

I started this story in mid-August and kept hating it. I could not get the opening right. I hated the boy i had written and hated his father even more. I could not even settle on why he was running across a field with a tornado in pursuit. I dumped my entire draft three times. Finally, I started writing on it again and came up with reasonable to me solutions to all of that. I had a boy and a family, including Dad, that I liked. The flow seemed somewhat logical albeit with a few rough spots. I set the story in 1979 to make things feel more realistic to me.

Speaking of rough spots - I always have them in every story I write. They are always a combo of typos, spelling errors, punctuation errors, continuity errors and illogical flow. That is why I always like to have an editor and one who will be brutally honest with me. Several have helped over the years: St. George/Kat, Skater, Jack Wells, Trixie, PaddleMe, PJFranklin and Adric. For the past three years or so, I have relied mostly on Skip Trace to be my go to editor. Skip proved his worth again with this story smoothing out the rough spots. After the edits are done, i then usually send a draft to 3 or 4 other authors I am close with to give me more brutally honest opinions. If you have ever gotten a draft from me pre-release then you know who you are. I believe that it is absolutely crucial to have another set of eyes, or multiple sets, look at a story before it is submitted. If you do not have said set of eyes then find one.

Back to the story, 12-year-old Adam lives on a Nebraska farm with his parents and a younger brother and it is 1979. It is a regular Saturday of farm life until it isn't. Everything changes when a sudden tornado hits the farm. Adam's only fear is for the well-being of his pet piglet, Herman. The story progresses and we learn a lot about Adam's father and his strength of character. The story is told from the POV of a now adult Adam, a practicing attorney.

Thanks for considering it.

Just finished the last story, and I'm still crying which is something that hasn't happened to me from reading anything since I was 16.  If you haven't read these stories, they are a must read.  Bravo, Jack.  I don't have enough superlatives for how really excellent this entire series is.

Mr. Afinch.  The Summer Chapter had me crying also.  Every time I read it over again, I cry.  I guess you can call it being invested in a story and its characters.  I knew all through the story this was going to happen.  Heck anyone reading the story knows it has to happen sometime and in this chapter it does, but even knowing, I cried.

I told Jack after reading that chapter the story was over for me.  It was complete, done, finished.  I had my emotional breakdown, so it accomplished its goal.  Jack of course wrote one more chapter "Another Home" to close the story as it should be closed filling in all the gaps.

But the chapter "Summer" will always be the highlight of that story for me.

Back in the very early 90s, when I hadn't even heard of AOL, I read a BBS called Foxxnet, and it had a series called Dr. Owh, but it was a series, with a Dr. Who analog traveling through time with someone I assume was Adric (the Dr. Who character, not our fellow member), who got spanked in different ways throughout time.  That series and this story seem to have nothing in common, and I guess the name isn't too big a jump for multiple people to make.

https://malespank.net/viewStory.php?id=58964

A simply brilliant concept. The premise is simple: a time traveller/spanking enthusiast is able to witness corporal punishment in several time periods and situations. I loved this story and the way in which it was presented.

Thank you for the recommendation,.  I loved this story although I'll warn readers that it is long--and totally worth it.  Set in "my world", as a kid who did weekend and holiday rounds with my own dad from the age of 12 on, most of the story rings entirely true, including the will he or won't he anxiety.  I can't wait to read more from this author, and I'd love to hear more about these characters from him as well.