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Posted by: afinch
« on: November 14, 2025, 04:05:57 pm »

I loved it, although I loved your previous, less dark story more.  Not an issue with your writing--just with this one, I wanted to reach through the screen and strangle the 16 year old brother and his abusive father.
Posted by: David M. Katz
« on: November 14, 2025, 11:24:47 am »

Weird.

The censor let me get away with "shitty" three times but blanked out "a sshole". Oh, well, fixed it.
Posted by: David M. Katz
« on: November 14, 2025, 11:22:54 am »

I have been searching for ways to motivate my writing.  I asked some author friends to send me blurbs and prompts to see if they offered a jumping off spot.  Skip Trace offered "framed by my brother" as a prompt.

That clicked with me and I sat to write out my usual sort of product but it wasn't working. I felt I needed to go in a dark direction and do something I rarely do and that is put a shitty dad in the picture.  What is better than a shitty dad? Well, a shitty big brother added in as well.

Simon is gay. His brother has turned hateful because of it and the dad, well, he's just an a s s hole. Mom is ambivalent at best. Jake, the older brother, is a dumb jock but does manage to set Simon up to be punished by Dad.

This one is not happy and fluffy but I am still proud of it and would ask you to give it a shot.

https://malespank.net/viewStory.php?id=59839

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AI rendering of 16 yo Jake and 14 yo Simon: