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Posted by: afinch
« on: December 25, 2025, 04:32:38 pm »

Skip, please don't be done.  Jack and Skip, I have been recommending this story to anyone I know who is aware of MMSA as "not a spanking story, but literature that includes spankings."  I re-read the entire series today as I stayed home alone.
Posted by: Jack
« on: December 25, 2025, 12:52:21 am »

As promised, this is the original 14-page treatment I sent Skip when I first had this idea.  Back then, it was just for me and him to share, which becomes obvious in places (or maybe I was hoping he'd like it enough to expand it, which is really what happened).

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1neg3Tzg6J1lAHSxbVdZBDX2AjkZaLsRAWZ9_-blqI5Q/edit?usp=sharing

If this format doesn't work, let me know, and I'll copy and paste it here.

Thanks again for all the kind feedback.
Posted by: Skip Trace
« on: December 25, 2025, 12:14:59 am »

Thanks, Adric, Zyngaru, and Kier! Your kind words are greatly appreciated! After the “too much detail” feedback, and with the post-writing letdown particularly acute after finishing a story that has been in the works since February, I was a little discouraged. (It’s possible I texted Jack to say, “Well, as long as the two of us are happy with it…”) It is reassuring that the three of you enjoyed it too. (“For discriminating tastes…”  :) )

Special thanks to Adric for editing and David M. Katz for expediting the review and posting of the four-part story.

Extra special thanks to Jack for a wonderful idea and the 14-page treatment he mentioned, most of which is word-for-word in the final story. My most recent Anderson story was originally written in 2017, and I really thought I was done. Without Jack’s inspiration and enthusiasm, this story would not have happened.
Posted by: afinch
« on: December 24, 2025, 04:30:56 pm »

I just finished reading the final chapter.  I can hardly see for the tears in my eyes.

I am so sad the series is done, so happy with the ending, and so impressed by the magnificent story you created.  Not a spanking story or stories--but literature every bit as good as "Ordinary People" (the film and novel of which I will now have to revisit).
Posted by: Zyngaru
« on: December 24, 2025, 12:07:05 pm »

Quote from: Jack on December 20, 2025, 01:17:21 am
Thought I'd mention that part 2 is now up - https://malespank.net/viewStory.php?id=60130

And since I forgot it in my first post - https://malespank.net/viewStory.php?id=60102

We had one feedback on part 1 that was basically complaining about too much detail.

You can hardly ever have too much detail.  It's the detail that defines the story.

Quote from: Jack on December 20, 2025, 01:17:21 am

Likewise, I doubt many people go to MMSA seeking high literature.

I want plot!  There has to be a story.  Not just a description of a spanking.  Heck, you can just mention that a spanking took place and I am fine.  Plot!  Plot!  Plot!  It's the story I am interested in.
Posted by: Jack
« on: December 24, 2025, 11:24:18 am »

All of this story is now posted.

Part 3 - https://malespank.net/viewStory.php?id=60155

Part 4 - https://malespank.net/viewStory.php?id=60166

BIG OL' HONKING SPOILERS FOR PART 4

Spoiler (hover to show)

It's been a long road, and there have been a lot of changes for both Skip and myself.  He did a huge amount of work turning my original treatment into a real story, and at the same time, he did a lot to make me understand why I always loved Ordinary People so much.  It was a privilege to play in his sandbox again, so thanks to him and thanks to all of you who took the time to read it.  Hope it was as good for you as it was for me.
Posted by: afinch
« on: December 20, 2025, 06:22:11 am »

Which is why I search out your stories, and Danny's, and a number of others and scroll on by 90+% of what I perceive to be junk on the forum.  Keep writing the way you do.
Posted by: Jack
« on: December 20, 2025, 01:17:21 am »

Thought I'd mention that part 2 is now up - https://malespank.net/viewStory.php?id=60130

And since I forgot it in my first post - https://malespank.net/viewStory.php?id=60102

We had one feedback on part 1 that was basically complaining about too much detail.  To me, it's the quotidian details that make a story like this.  It's easy to write a wham, bam. thank you, sir story (but even then, not always able to do it well), to me, it's the details Skip put into developing the situation, the characters, and the budding relationship that really make me invested in the story.

Spoilers incoming for Part 1.

I believe it was W.H. Auden who first said 'thou shalt not read the Bible for it's prose.'  Likewise, I doubt many people go to MMSA seeking high literature.  Yet to me, while the spankings and paddlings are excited, I'm really moved by a man traumatized by loss, who's still been putting one foot in front of the other, yet who still hasn't recovered from it.  Not completely.  Reminds me of a song from Garth Brooks Ropin' the Wind album - What She's Doing Now.  So yeah, I guess if all you want is for some kid to get paddled so you can get your rocks off, that kind of thing gets in the way.  To me, that's the kind of detail that makes the story.
Posted by: Zyngaru
« on: December 17, 2025, 03:33:25 pm »

It is more of the same, which in this case is a GOOD thing.
Posted by: afinch
« on: December 16, 2025, 11:52:49 pm »

I so loved the original serries, and am so far loving this one.  I can't wait for the next chapter.
Posted by: Adric
« on: December 16, 2025, 01:35:29 pm »

This collaboration is a really excellent continuation of a series that Skip started years ago.  I've been a fan of that series since it started, and now with Jack's contribution it is even more appealing.  I loved the school-related scenes described from teachers' perspectives and the relationship that develops between Mr. Anderson's family and Charlie.  Great read so far, and I'm looking forward to reading more.
Posted by: Jack
« on: December 16, 2025, 10:07:27 am »

This story has been in the works for quite a while.  Early this year, while I was in my manic writing period, I developed a real love for Jeff Anderson and Caleb Stiles (you might have noticed my 13 part celebration of that youngster). Skip and I had already been conversing after I read one of his Christmas stories (Angels and Devils, which was set in Dallas, and I was trying to deduce the mall in the story). 


After reading the entire Mr. Anderson Looks Back (and Caleb at least twice) and discussing it with Skip, I wrote some fanfic about Caleb, then Mr. Anderson.  The first one was based on Skip's original inspiration for Caleb, and is no longer possible, since Caleb Looks Back (with Skip's permission) took Caleb in a different direction,  It's the other story that's important now.


I wrote, simply as something for Skip to appreciate, a 14 page treatment that mixed actual story with quick descriptions of entire scenes.  To be honest, it was a self-insert story, and Charlie is very much based on me at that age.  I enjoyed writing it and hoped he would enjoy reading it.


He loved it.


He loved it so much that he encouraged me to expand it into an entire series.  I refused.  I refused because I was afraid I wouldn't get Mr. Anderson's voice correct.  Instead, Skip agreed to co-author it, though he put a huge amount of work into expanding and developing my original ideas.


Anyway, I hope you enjoy the final result as much as I did.